[Smut Marathon] Round 2 – The Results

end-1733893_640The results are in for Round 2 of the Smut Marathon, and the feedback is now available on the blog post containing our entries. I have not made it through to Round 3. While I am obviously disappointed, my feeling are overwhelmingly positive. Before I go on I will start with the entry I submitted. The original metaphor I used from the first round is in Italics.

The Disciple

The hot water cascades over his body, cleansing him as his ritual begins. Once dry he adorns himself with his symbols of submission. Reciting his mantra with every buckle he fastens. ‘I am bound to only you, I serve you with reverence and devotion.’ He is like the High Priest, called to worship at the temple of her body. I am their disciple. I bear witness to their passion, as I am baptised by the glory of their love.

When all the entries were released I knew as soon as I read them that I wouldn’t make it through to Round 3. From the way the judging went in Round 1, I had a feeling that there were others there that would draw people in more. Not because I don’t think my entry was good though. I am proud of what I wrote and to be honest I really love what I came up with.

When I first read through the feedback my initial reaction was ‘well clearly I know nothing about writing’, and believe it or not that was not solely based on the feedback for my own piece, but on many of the other entries too. People who are in a place to offer useful criticisms to those of us in this contest, not only didn’t respond overly well to what I had written, but also did not favour the pieces I especially liked and pieces that I thought had glaring flaws or just to my mind weren’t as good as others were given higher praise than I would have guessed.

The feedback I received was a mixed bag.

  • Halfway you change perspectives from ‘he’ to ‘I’. I am missing a story here.
  • Words have depicted great anticipation and ritualistic preparation for the sexy scenario which is likely to follow, but I feel this prologue itself isn’t erotic.
  • This one was missing something, I thought. It’s good and it’s well-written, and it seems to extend the metaphor versus tell its own tale using it, both of which are good ways of doing similar things. I think it was because this one was almost too short, too succinct. That said, I liked it!
  • This is beautiful and intense. At first I thought that you should have used more words, as you had quite some to spare, but this just works so well that I see why you have left it this short. More words might have taken away the strength of the ones you have used.

I think all the feedback is fair and accurate, except the first piece. I think the context of the words and the title of the piece should lead most people to understand why there is a change in perspectives. The Disciple, the ‘I’ is telling the story, he bearing witness so is he watching the ‘he’. Perhaps a line break before the last sentence would have made that clearer. Had the feedback been, ‘I had to read this a couple of times before I understood the change in perspective’ then my feathers would be a little less ruffled. That said I disagreed with all of the feedback that particular judge left for all the pieces, so clearly we do not view things in the same way.

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I wrote the above paragraphs on the day the Round 2 results came out and have been pondering the past few days whether I should start this blog post over. I’m worried I sound bitter at my leaving the contest and as that really isn’t the case. The reason I’ve chosen to leave it is because I think it’s valid.

The judges are entirely within their rights to judge on whatever aspects of writing they choose too. However some feedback was far more helpful than others in assisting the writers to not only act upon the feedback but also accept it as useful critique as opposed to lowering their morale.

I feel hugely positive about the experience I had in the first two rounds of the Smut Marathon. In only two rounds I discovered ways to improve my writing and also new ways to approach my writing overall. I identified where my strengths lay and to be honest, what I do well is what I have always wanted to do with my writing; convey feeling and create emotion.

Is it important to me that my punctuation and grammar is good? Of course it is, and I will continue to improve my knowledge and execution of the technical side of my pieces. However, I suspect that isn’t why people read what I write. You don’t come here for the perfect use of commas, or the the well chosen placement of a semi-colon. With any luck you’re here because you enjoy what I have to say, either because it resonates with you or offers some glimmer of advice. Perhaps you only come for the erotica because it turns you on and makes you want to touch yourself. On every level I am okay with all those reasons for you being here.

Many of my favourite entrants of the Smut Marathon have left alongside me. I am as sad to see their journey come to end as. However I will be swinging by their blogs to see what wonderful works they come up with and you should too.

Of course 40 brilliant writers still remain and I am so excited to see what the future rounds bring. I have no doubt that we will see some wonderful assignments be presented to them and they will rise to the challenges set with gloriously delicious smut.

I will be voting and blogging about future rounds of the Smut Marathon and I urge you all to place your votes too. I appreciate it is a lot to read, but too many people said they were sad to see their favourites leave but hadn’t actually voted for them. I appreciate we all lead busy lives but those votes might have made the difference to your favourite staying or going.

The most unexpected but also the most enjoyable thing to come out of my entering thesoft-toys-3158361_640 Smut Marathon is new friends. I have discovered so many new bloggers and Twitter friends and that has made every moment of entering worthwhile.

Life and time permitting I fully intend to enter the Smut Marathon next year and I hope that entrants who have both left the contest already and those that still remain will be back too.

As I mentioned in a previous blog post I actually wrote three potential pieces of micro-fiction for the second round and I will now share the other two pieces with you.

Absent Lover

When he came home to her, she would lose herself in him as his presence engulfed her and their bodies entwined. She examined and filed away every sight, sound, touch, taste and scent; her mind becoming an ever-expanding catalogue of sensual experiences to be re-experienced at will. She loved to delve into those memories when he was out of reach. When she ached for him and longed to feel his touch. Her hands moving deftly across her soft flesh, as desire flushed upon her skin and her wet, aching cunt called her fingers to action. Her fingers would beckon him, memories and orgasm growing stronger together. Until mind and body exploded in tandem satiating for the briefest of moments her long for him.

The Witness

His cock twitched and ached at the sight before him. The three lovers twisted into a knot of flesh, bearing no identifiable shape to the witness in the chair. He longed to be amongst them, to feel their soft, supple bodies against his own. Mouths lapped at nipples and cunts, causing a melody of pleasure at odds with the involuntary grunts that escaped his gagged mouth. Limbs bound to the sturdy chair beneath him, his only protest at his lack of attention was to strain with futility against his bindings. His body betrayed his enjoyment though. Cock erect, tip glistening with excitement. They had him right where they wanted him, and he was exactly where he loved to be.

Good luck to all the remaining entrants, I will be cheering you all on and sending positive vibes your way throughout.


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8 thoughts on “[Smut Marathon] Round 2 – The Results”

  1. I’m sorry you didn’t make it through. But I am glad you found the experience worthwhile and educational! I actually liked your second and third possible entries better than the one you submitted. In your last sentence of the second, I would change “long” for “longing”. My fave is the third—perhaps because I identify more with the topic and situation! lol
    You are a good writer Floss! And you have a voice I like to hear. All the best, and maybe next year!!

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    1. Yep! I had a feeling the other two entries might have been better, but alas I went with what I liked more, not what might appeal to the public more. Silly bean that I am. But I’ve got the biggest list of blog posts to write, so I’m going to get focusing on them, and look forward to placing my votes in the next round, without the nerves of awaiting the results, lol =D

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  2. I read all of the entries and tried to leave feedback for each one that I really disliked. I found, going into it, if I wanted to leave feedback for every single entry, it would take me days to go through them, so I had to draw the line. I remember yours. I liked it. It wasn’t one of my top three but it was in the top ten, and I truly thought my top ten would make it through. There were a lot of entries where I felt the writers hadn’t spent enough time building the paragraph. I’m an editor at heart, so I did my best to give quality feedback regardless. I’m sorry you didn’t move forward in the competition, your entry was good. However, as you said, there is always a positive with every negative. That you made new friends is a huge positive. And by the way, that first feedback you got is full of it. If he/she had taken the care to read the paragraph a second time, the change of perspective would have become clear. I think. However, since the judges didn’t have to claim any background in editing or literature or even erotica, you have to accept that some would be better at this than others. 🙂

    And as an added note, “The Witness” is outstanding. I love it. (oh and post some of the blogs so I can go visit too).

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    1. Bless you. Thank you so much for this thoughtful comment. Lots of great points in there and it’s lovely to hear that y other entries are well liked, even if I was silly enough not to use them, lol.

      I have published ‘#SoSS: My Smut Marathon Favourites’ today, which has got 12 of my favourite bloggers who entered alongside me. Hope you find some new blogs to enjoy from them. :_

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  3. I think the main difference in the second round was personal taste and some of the entries that were more open to interpretation were the ones favoured. You are amazing writer. I couldn’t fault your entry in the sense of quality (same as many others), the competition itself gave too much space for other factors (and personal bias) to come into play. So basically there wasn’t enough poor quality entries or duds to make the voting process easier.

    I wish you could’ve put all three entries in for the second round somehow.

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    1. Thanks so much for reading and commenting. I absolutely agree with all your points. I wish I could have entered all three too, but on the plus side I think I know how I’d do things differently next year and that is useful to have learnt. 🙂

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  4. I am sorry you are out of the race and would really have wanted you in there much longer, especially because of your enthusiasm and the way you say that you have already learned from the first two rounds.
    With regards to feedback, in the end everyone gives feedback from their own perspective and it is true that some people are a bit harsher than others. I agree, grammar and spelling is not the most important, the story is. If the story is super good, any small errors on grammar and spelling might not even be noticed. I think it tends to irritate more when the story is not good.
    Thank you for your continued support, Floss, and I love that I have discovered you and your blog because you signed up for the Smut Marathon 🙂

    Rebel xox

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    1. Aw bless you. That’s such a lovely comment to read. I will still be cheering from the sidelines though, and I’ll do more Wicked Wednesday posts and I’ll be back into the Smut Marathon next year with any luck. So I’m sure you will see plenty of my ramblings popping up all over the place =D I’m just so happy to have made so many new blogging friends, which I never would have done if I hadn’t entered. It has been such a blessing x

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